Donatella

 

D 2014

It’s Friday morning, and that means it’s Friday Fictioneers time!  My submission for this week came in at exactly 99 words and is listed below. If you like flash fiction and want to learn more about Friday Fictioneers, here’s the link to their page for this week’s photo prompt.  http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/04/02/4-april-2014/#respond

studio-lights-from-kent

The light beckoned to her. Donatella knew it meant trouble, but its siren song was proving to be irresistible. She took one step, then another, until she was almost close enough to touch it. Her dress fluttered around her legs in the breeze that always accompanied her. A faint smile played on Donatella’s lips, as she reached up with her hand towards the lamp, the light glowing warmly.

Footsteps echoed in the darkness, and the night watchman came into the pool of light. Everything was as it should be, just him in an empty studio. The silence was comforting.

 

 

 

 

 

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17 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. rochellewisoff
    Apr 04, 2014 @ 09:39:28

    Dear Julia,

    I was set to welcome you to Friday Fictioneers but I see in following your tag that it’s a welcome back that’s in order.

    I’m mystified by this piece. Is Donatella the watchman’s fantasy or did she disappear in the light?

    Love the writing and the mystique.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  2. Alice Audrey
    Apr 04, 2014 @ 19:07:08

    Donatella is a ghost?

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  3. sustainabilitea
    Apr 05, 2014 @ 02:22:47

    Nicely understated horror story, Julia.

    janet

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  4. Helena Hann-Basquiat
    Apr 05, 2014 @ 11:07:23

    I’d be remiss in not commenting on this piece, because your writing is lovely. But I’m with Rochelle in that I’m not sure you fully realized what was going on your your mind for this one? I’d love to hear what your thoughts are as to what was going on here.

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    • Julia Stevenson
      Apr 05, 2014 @ 11:46:49

      I was trying to infer that Donatella is a ghost – a timid ghost that doesn’t show herself to those in the living world – perhaps even a spirit that doesn’t know she’s actually passed on.

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  5. Teresa Cypher
    Apr 05, 2014 @ 17:16:41

    Very visual, and you’ve done a good job of creating atmosphere in a few words. Nicely done! 🙂 Enjoy the A to Z 😉

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  6. Amy Reese
    Apr 06, 2014 @ 15:54:29

    I enjoyed your writing, Julia. I’m curious what kind of relationship this ghost has with the watchman. A past perhaps? Nice story!

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  7. Sun
    Apr 07, 2014 @ 02:03:57

    i love how you hid your “ghost” character until the end…she seems to miss the spotlights. lovely story. ♥

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  8. patriciaruthsusan
    Apr 07, 2014 @ 08:40:33

    Well written. I hope she finds more peace in her search for the light. It might be difficult if she’s unaware that she’s died. Good story.

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  9. Nan Falkner
    Apr 09, 2014 @ 04:38:10

    I love Donatella being a timid ghost. I bet at least 80% of ghosts are timid – maybe more. Very dark and eerie! Thanks and you are so clever! Nan 🙂

    Reply

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